[第二轮评论]严肃严肃~
<p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman";">【第二轮评论】严肃严肃～</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt;"><p><font face="Times New Roman"> </font></p></span></p><p><font face="Times New Roman"> </font></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman";">群杀不是比谁比谁更</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt;"><font face="Times New Roman">YD</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman";">～</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt;"><p><font face="Times New Roman"> </font></p></span></p><p><font face="Times New Roman"> </font></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">001 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=115991" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">策疆</span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">慕容冲贴杀慕容绍</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">简评：画面感很强，两军交锋那一段写的尤其好，虽然只是片断，但有张有弛，很有在看电影的感觉。不足之处正如那位一品山人所说，总觉得少点什么。少点什么？我觉得应该是那种扑面而来得苍凉感和色彩感，现在的感觉是，场景故事情节都很好，可是人物扁扁的，隔了一层似。如果凤凰儿可以活到下轮，提高要求，文章要在感染力方面多多增强。打分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">8</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">002 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=115996" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">碧螺春晓送春归</span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">桓熙帖杀金奉春</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">简评：第一轮故事的延续，虽然杀人手段有些老套，但因为前半部分的铺垫相当成功，而并不觉得突兀。故事跳跃性很强，好处是因为不同的时间和场景转换，让文章在纵深度加强，人物形象十分丰满。坏处是因为衔接转换太多，故事显得有些凌乱。提高要求，如果下轮继续，争取让故事脉络更清晰。打分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">8.5</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">003 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=116015" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">四季图</span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">步留仙贴杀思无邪</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">简评：聊斋聊斋聊斋。笑，是类似于聊斋故事，却处处流淌魏晋之风，处处透出是真名士自风流的影子。本文的好，不在故事，而在人物。无论是用讨来银子请人死囚喝酒的<personname productid="唐" wst="on"></personname>唐<personname></personname>先生还是视死若探访亲友的风九，是视仁义宽厚的步庄主还是无名无姓的先生，一个个形象鲜明飘然物外让人心折恨不能跟他们一起痛饮一场才好。若论不足，结尾太急是其一，出场人物多而犹如走过场实际意义不大是其二。本文评分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">9</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">004 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=116032" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">浪淘沙</span></span><span lang="EN-US"><span lang="EN-US"><br/> </span></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">谁主江山</span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">青鸾帖杀桓伊</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">简评：故事很长很曲折，没有沦为流水帐，说明作者驾驭故事的能力很强，十分难得。不过总体来看，第一部分夜幕太初宫比第二部分江山皇权罪几多好。第一部分人物情节感情节奏各方面都十分到位，读者感同身受。第二部分因为作者太想表达自己的见解显得有些乱。本文评分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">8</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">005 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=116056" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">司马</span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">司马卓杀桓桢</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="BACKGROUND: white; MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman";">简评：这篇文的问题是，几乎没有故事，一半内容是写司马卓的追忆。首尾差异很大，桓桢的死也是为杀而杀，牵强的很。而且开头用词有问题，比如这段“建康城外百余里，十几户的人家一座小村，却有几间客栈，个把酒家。原因无他，这是从西边进建康城的唯一通道。若是早起，傍晚就可以到建康城外的驿站了，赶得急还能进城。</span><span style="mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt;"><font face="Times New Roman"><br/> </font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman";">”“个把”是形容少的，用在文中此处总觉得不太恰当，请司马兄斟酌。打分：</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt;"><font face="Times New Roman">7</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman";">分</span><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">006 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=116107" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">刺客</span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">乞伏乾归贴杀青鸾</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">简评：开篇很帅，仿佛一张历史画卷展开之时，沧桑感扑面而来。可是看到后来本评却发现渐渐变调，虽然本评一向以淑女要求自己，看到结尾处也实在忍不住很想骂句</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">TMD</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">，不管是杀手被评委刺激到还是评委被杀手刺激到，本评认为，既然来参加群杀游戏，虽然游戏是第一，写文却首先一定要对得起自己。为拉风而色情，只能徒落下乘，断不可取。即使写得不错，但本评自有本评的原则和坚持，先旨说明，本轮凡色情文章，不管主办方算不算作废，在本评处均作</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">0</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分处理。抗议无效，我很遗憾。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">007 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=116184" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">独活</span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">王绝之帖杀张浪</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">简评：好文！好在长而不臃，每一小节都似信手拈来举重若轻。出场人物众多却不见其乱，人物对话机智可爱让人心折。看结尾处，会心一笑，作者一定也是古迷，王绝之失踪之谜不亚沈浪香帅失踪之谜，风流成绝响。打分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">9</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">008 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=116208" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">复仇</span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">勃邺帖杀尹万；对勃邺使用补血药</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">简评：看了会让人心酸的故事。虽然因为作者的叙述太多，使文章看起来更像一个长篇的概括，但也许是因为特别偏爱这种热血少年故事的缘故吧，私心里很喜欢这篇文。因此提高要求，如果下轮继续，希望看到一个展开的故事，而不是大段的叙述，人物来不及仔细刻画已经结束。打分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">8.5</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">009 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=116232" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US"><font color="#000000">魔</font></span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">鸠摩罗什杀朱灵宝</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: Verdana; mso-hansi-font-family: Verdana;"><font face="宋体">简评：很可爱的故事。看似好无关系的三组画面，被作者慧心连在一起，讲述一个关于欲望和真实的道理。很多看似无心之笔，却处处起点睛作用。因为喜欢这样轻灵的写法，因此一样提高要求，下轮若写，尽量做到不落痕迹。加油。打分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: Verdana;">8.5</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: Verdana; mso-hansi-font-family: Verdana;"><font face="宋体">分。</font></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: Verdana;"><br/> <span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></span></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">010 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=116242" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US"><font color="#000000">乱</font></span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">田青黛贴杀南宫德</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: Verdana; mso-hansi-font-family: Verdana;"><font face="宋体">简评：看了这个故事才知道夫子所言非虚，</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: Verdana;">"</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: Verdana; mso-hansi-font-family: Verdana;"><font face="宋体">最毒妇人心</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: Verdana;">"</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: Verdana; mso-hansi-font-family: Verdana;"><font face="宋体">。笑，正如标题所言，人物关系的确有够乱。文笔不错，故事也算条理清晰。遗憾的是立意不高，人物对话多肉麻可笑。希望作者下轮多多注意，写出有可看性的作品来。打分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: Verdana;">5</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: Verdana; mso-hansi-font-family: Verdana;"><font face="宋体">分</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: Verdana;"><br/> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p> </p></span></p><p> </p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">011 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=116310" target="_blank"><font color="#000000"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">似是故人来</span></span><br/></font></a> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">周伯仁贴杀拓拔寔君</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: Verdana; mso-hansi-font-family: Verdana;">简评：所谓</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: Arial; mso-hansi-font-family: Arial; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial;">大隐隐朝市。</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: Verdana; mso-hansi-font-family: Verdana;">水村山郭，向来就是武侠小说中出没高人的不二场所。笑。文章写的很平，没有大起大落高潮迭起，却自有一派恬淡弥散全篇之中。不足之处，结尾太急，用词遣句还须斟酌。打分：</span></font><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: Verdana;">7.5</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: Verdana; mso-hansi-font-family: Verdana;"><font face="宋体">分。</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: Verdana;"><br/> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p> </p></span></p><p> </p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">012 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=116332" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US"><font color="#000000">家族</font></span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">尹万帖杀桓熙</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: Verdana; mso-hansi-font-family: Verdana;"><font face="宋体">简评：看文章时始终有一种积压感，仿佛东西排的太满，让人目不暇接缺乏喘息时间。而整体故事又流于简单。提高要求，下轮若写，不妨在文章布局上努力些，别把想说的话全部说完，留一定空间，让读者自己思考。打分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: Verdana;">7</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: Verdana; mso-hansi-font-family: Verdana;"><font face="宋体">分。</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: Verdana;"><br/> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p> </p></span></p><p> </p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">013 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=116546" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">魅毒</span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">谢道韫帖杀计好</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">简评：一个女人呓语一样的独白。我想作者的本意也许是想写某种魅一样的深情，爱一个人爱的无法自拔的痛楚。想法不错，但是，对不起，遍观全文我没有找到那种感觉。也许如果某些感情无法用独白表达时，试试讲故事，兴许会好一些。分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">6</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p> </p></span></p><p> </p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">014 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=116587" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">断弦</span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">桓伊帖杀拓拔什翼犍</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">简评：文笔很好。时下同人界文章写的能达作者水准者应该已算高手。这篇文，怎么说？如果是在同人网站看到，我也许会很欣赏甚至很敬佩作者。但这里是群杀现场热血古龙，一个不需要依赖任何色情成分亦不需要依赖任何断背噱头来增加人气的古龙专题文学网站。因此基于这个理由，我很抱歉，本文</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">0</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">015 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=116606" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">哭城</span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">朴正元贴杀无尘</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">简评：好文。虽然看的时候很有在看日本漫画的感觉呀。笑。先不说那些男主角们的对话是否很合适，但首先给人的感觉是两个字，好帅。笑。再者是文中的战争场面虽然还显得很稚嫩，但很多时候，这样的大场面，并不是因为你描述的特别准确而让人感觉特别好，而是你写出了那种感觉才让人觉得特别好，无疑，作者写出了这种感觉。最后提一点，也许开篇不用那首诗直接进正文也许会更好。一家之言，请朴兄斟酌。打分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">8.5</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">016 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=116628" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">晴天</span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">张浪帖杀谯穆</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">简评：又见乱世小人物的悲哀。笑。一入江湖岁月催。也许丫头不明白天下为什么而乱江湖人为什么而随便杀人，但不代表她没有思想没有感情是行尸走肉可以随意杀戮。提高要求，如果下轮还继续的话，在情节设计上希望可以有独到之处，让人耳目一新。打分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">8</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">017 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=116639&extra=&page=1#116639" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">肉色黄昏</span></span></a> (</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">作废</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">)<br/> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">废贴，不评。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">018 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=116698" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">一定要杀</span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">段梦汐贴杀郦戎</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">简评：就文章而论，因杀而杀，中规中矩。但文笔就在那呢，又不差，却没有出彩处，可见是不用心。希望下轮有机会再写，多花些心思，只当练练笔也行，能突破自己岂非也是一种收获。加油。打分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">6.5</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">019 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=116709&extra=&page=1#116709" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">往生</span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">拓拔野帖杀郦戎</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">简评：先说好处，文章写的很有感情。哥哥对弟弟那种爱很让人感动。再说缺点，开头太平铺直叙，有点流水帐了。每部分过渡的地方，跳跃太快，没交代清楚。如果没看过背景会让人觉得不明就里。另文中一些词汇运用的也不是很恰当，希望作者注意这些细节。打分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">6</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">020 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=116727" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">勃亚之死</span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">宗照月杀勃亚</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">简评：看后只有一个感觉，乱。其实情节也不是很复杂，但因为出场人物很多，而作者又把对话做为了支撑情节发展很重要的一部分，所以让人感觉很乱。提高要求，如果下轮还写，好好布局，先把情节梳理清楚，然后量体裁衣也许可看性会增强很多。打分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">6</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">021 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=116859" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">红雪</span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">孟郦白帖杀鸠摩罗什</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">简评：整篇文章更象一篇散文而不象小说。当然文笔是很美的，但故事性太弱。爱情固然重要，亦不可忘记作为武侠特有的侠义精神。下轮若写，请多加注意。打分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">6</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">022 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=116952" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">流殇</span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">勃亚贴杀张浪</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">简评：很搞笑。很好玩。还有很恶趣味。极尽调侃之能事。但我在想的是这么连一本正经调侃都举重若轻的好文笔，为什么不写篇真正的好文章呢？难道就仅仅因为想拉风一把？</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">SORRY</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">。也许你做到了，但遗憾已落下乘。打分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">0</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">023 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=116957" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">江南</span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">张育帖杀金羡云</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">简评：如果我是小学老师，我一定会说，小盆友，这样写半截文素不对滴挖。文章要有六要素，</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: Arial; mso-hansi-font-family: Arial; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial;">时间、地点、任务、事情的起因、经过、结果，</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">然后才算一篇完整的文章。笑，开玩笑了呢。但是这篇文章给人的感觉确实是刚渐入佳境，马上就没了。让人怅然若失感觉缺了点什么。希望下轮可以看到作者好文。打分：</span></font><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">6.5</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p> </p></span></p><p> </p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">024 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=116964" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">《回响江湖》之萧无水的剑</span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">萧无水贴杀王绝之</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">简评：杀人也许并不需要搞很复杂，但游戏需要有游戏精神支撑。杀个把人也许很容易，但搞很复杂的无怨无悔用心去写一篇也许会很快就被人遗忘的文章却是为了对的起自己。很欣赏萧公子的调侃功夫，嘲人之余也不乏自嘲，最最难得。打分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">8</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">025 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=116983" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">杀死逍遥</span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">谯穆帖杀逍遥剑客</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">简评：开头很古龙很古龙，结尾也很古龙很古龙。对话很古龙很古龙。笑。小猫的意思并不是说文字象古龙，而是人物的性格和整篇文章的意境很像。因为是古迷，私心偏爱的东西自然不免会挑剔，比如人物对话显得很生硬，情节安排太过刻意，不免又斧凿之嫌。提高要求，一直觉得说一个人的文章很象另一个人大抵不是什么好话，即使那人是古龙。因此，下轮若有机会，在此基础上加入更多自己的东西，毕竟形成自己风格才是目的。加油。要努力证明一下自己哦。打分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">8</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">026 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=116985" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">蛰变</span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">陆中山帖杀慕容麟</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">简评：文章不错，很有江湖气息，但遗憾之处在于结构太散，显得乱，让人看到中间有难以继续看下去的感觉。如果重新构思布局一下也许会好些。打分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">6.5</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">027 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=116987" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">骊歌</span></span>.<span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">湮灭</span></span><br/></a> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">张重帖杀步留仙</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">简评：汗一下，父子俩为了一个男人反目。慕容冲是那个可怜的小受，善良，苍白，柔弱。无言，有点被雷到。虽然，不可否认，楼主文笔不错。打分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">0</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分。理由请参考《断弦》。多谢。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">028 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=116997" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">烟花不堪剪</span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">权翼贴杀田青黛</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">简评：第一部分写的最好。随后也许是因为赶文的缘故，情节急转直下，成流水帐，十分可惜。打分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">6</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">029 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=116998" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">王夫人传</span></span><br/></a> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">无尘帖杀张重</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">简评：作者古文功底不错。人物刻画相当成功。<personname productid="王" wst="on"></personname>王<personname></personname>夫人之气度风骨让人心折。不足之处则在于语言不够凝练，风格亦有不一致处。打分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">7.5</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">030 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=116999" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">深忆</span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">郦戎帖杀段梦汐</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">简评：想法很好，以郝连勃勃夜探郦戎为始，以郝连勃勃一句：“朕负了亚父</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">……”</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">为终，前后呼应，结尾也算干脆利落。不足之处是中间情节很单薄不足以成为支撑全文之中心。打分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">6.5</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">031 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=117002" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">流年</span></span>·<span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">英雄</span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">段鬼泣帖杀桓温</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">简评：写法和排版一样很有特色。笑。以历史为支点，选取一些点来支撑整个故事。看似无甚关联，其实息息相关。充满历史感。打分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">8.5</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">032 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=117005" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">相忘于江湖</span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">毛应之帖杀段鬼泣</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">简评：和第一轮文风差别很大。在故事性方面强很多。出场人物众多，却并不显得乱，这点很厉害。不足处应该是人物之间的对白，在整篇文中显得偏弱。打分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">8.5</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">033 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=117008" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">巴山吴水两茫茫，休向故人问故桑</span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">铜虎帖杀高健</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">简评：好文。洗练，简洁。情节安排很别致。打分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">8.5</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">034 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=117009" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">江湖夜雨十年灯</span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">桓秘帖杀张重</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">简评：很喜欢这个名字。但也许因为篇幅的原因，很多情节没有展开就匆忙煞尾。也许作者构思如此，却未必妥当。打分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">7</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">035 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=117010" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">无邪求战</span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">王猛贴杀拓拔野</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;"><font face="宋体">简评：死人很多的文，对全队作战十分有利，因为领队在最后一刻要决定杀谁都没有关系。笑，但这并不代表作者没有用心写。虽然设置死人很多，但并不影响故事的完整性和流畅性。很不错。打分：</font></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">8</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">036 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=117011" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US">或许只是幻觉</span></span><br/></a> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">勃寒帖杀铜虎</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">简评：文章很简约，几乎是白描手法，写一个叫阿虎少年似幻觉的一场人生。看后却让人觉得莫名心酸，也不为什么，也许只为了一个少年</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: calibri; mso-hansi-font-family: calibri;">快中带有几分慵懒，慵懒中又颇有几分调皮，一种少年不识愁滋味的灿烂笑容。</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">文似清茶，淡却留香。打分：</span></font><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">8</span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">分。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p style="BACKGROUND: white; WORD-BREAK: break-all;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;">037 <a href="http://www.rxgl.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=117012" target="_blank"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma;"><span lang="EN-US"><font color="#000000">谁主沉浮</font></span></span></a><br/> </span><font face="宋体"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">思无邪贴杀张育</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman";">简评：感慨，终于评到最后一篇了，欢呼</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt;"><font face="Times New Roman">ING</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman";">，还好不算太晚，</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt;"><font face="Times New Roman">23</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman";">点</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt;"><font face="Times New Roman">06</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman";">分。记录下。笑。文章很大气。却又中规中矩。无特别处。最后一次向杀手提高要求，既然已有驾驭长篇把握人物的能力，为什么不在构思故事上多下点功夫，发前人之未发，脱颖而出呢？打分：</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt;"><font face="Times New Roman">8</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman";">分。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman";"></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman";"></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman";"></span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p>
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